Re-reading sections of the beginning, I started to worry about my characterizations for that time period since it occurs between LGM3 and DMD. They feel severely off to me, and I think it's because I wanted creepy, but with zombies you could actually sympathize with. Ya, go figure out my reasoning for that!
I finally faced the fact that I needed to start over, putting Twilizone to the side. This was after I'd reworked some portions of it, adding a darker beginning to the story and a section for some inner voice stuff for Stark, all of which is incorporated back into the original fic. Since this was for
Then I freaked when I saw something

When Kerne said she'd do the second beta despite not liking zombie fic, I was shocked but doing the happy dance because I was dying to find out if they were too similar in style. She told me the truth and it made me feel a whole hell of a lot better. I still almost went with the second to last version, but said screw it. It's not often that I'm happy with what I write anymore so I went for it. Ta-da!